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Pres. Obama's speech at the SHADE-A-THON White House Correspondents Dinner

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influencethis 29th-Apr-2012 05:08 pm (UTC)
Oh god, your grammar in this comment.

Actually it is an opinion packaged is a chaffing statement meant to illicit discussion


Corrected="Actually, it is an opinion packaged as a chafing statement meant to elicit discussion."

Chaffing: To make fun of in a good-natured way; tease.
Chafing: to cause friction.
You are clearly aiming for the latter.

Illicit: 1. Not sanctioned by custom or law; unlawful. 2. Linguistics Improperly formed; ungrammatical.
Elicit: a. To bring or draw out (something latent); educe. b. To arrive at (a truth, for example) by logic.
Again, wrong word use.

Now, I make this statement with the full expectation of receiving responses about how awesome it would be to marry Obama, and Obama bride this, Obama down the isle that.


"Bride" is not a verb.

But if you really stop and think about it... About the complexity of the presidency and why someone is or is not suited for that job, these things that all the cacklers in here are swooning over, have dreadfully little to do with it. At this point you may be wondering what sort of intelligent reply you could give me, but I fully expect...


Corrected="But if you really stop and think about it--about the complexity of the presidency and why someone is or is not suited for that job--these things that all the women in here are swooning over have dreadfully little to do with it. At this point you may be wondering what sort of intelligent reply you could give me, but I fully expect that I have drastically underestimated the average intelligence of this community."

Ellipses are used to mark unfinished thoughts or excluded sections of text. Here you are clearly trying to interject a full thought in the middle of a sentence, which is what the em-dash is used for.

You use the word cacklers, meaning "To laugh or talk in a shrill manner." The word "shrill" is a misogynist dog-whistle, often indicating that women are talking too much. A more intellectually honest option is to actually directly refer to subjects being discussed, i.e. women.

I believe the last correction stands for itself.

Edited at 2012-04-29 05:12 pm (UTC)
silver_sandals 29th-Apr-2012 10:09 pm (UTC)
You are epic. <3
influencethis 30th-Apr-2012 08:20 pm (UTC)
Aww thanks. I like to get my pedant on, and also translate douchebag into English.

Notice also how he replies to everyone but me.
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